Documentary First Draft and Feedback

 My first completed draft of my documentary: 

Feedback (focus group): 

Recap of Feedback -

What did you like about the documentary?

'It's really well put together, I love that it was chronological for each place, really educational, now I know a lot more about live music and the bands that performed here, even if you didn't have videos you had photos, just really well put together.' 

'I like the way you edited it, even without videos you were able to make the story come through, with the pictures you were able to educate people as a documentary should, the intro and outro have a nice pace, ending is very good for your professional practice.' 

What could I improve on?

'You could fix the voices / vocals as there's lots of white noise in the background, you can remove it on Premiere Pro to make it sound better.'

'I agree on fixing the background noise is there is a lot of white noise, also maybe adding some background music quietly as some clips do already have sound but most don't.' 

What I will take from this -

I did feel that the audio wasn't quite right in the background of the documentary, so from here I will go back to editing and change the audio levels so that everything is level - Since before my focus group when Sophie and Chris watched it for the first time, we had to adjust the volume several time as it was frequently going up and down, especially around my interview section. Furthermore, I am happy with the positive feedback, especially from Sophie exclaiming it was factual and she was able to learn new things, as from the planning stage this was always my main aim, to educate my audience.